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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent 
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When I look into your eyes, my soul burns with desire. My insomnia is a daily reminder, of the empty spaces between my fingers. That used to be filled with yours. I cant tell you what is keeping me from devotion. Everything I can come up with may be just another excuse. I am sorry for the pain I have caused you deep inside, I know the scars are there. SENIOR 06' |
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oh_my_goshijustgotexcited Member
since 2006-07-12
Posts 52USA, IDAHO |
good write, i thought it could have flowed a little better, but all in all good job... and congrats on graduating Viola |
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M e m o r i e s Junior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 14Alaska, USA |
I like it! I wished it was longer though T.T *puts on typical 13-year-old pout*. But, hey, it was still good! Oooo and you graduated?! Oh my gosh! That makes you a college girl! Wow, good job! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Well… I must admit I don’t like this one as well as some of the others I have seen written by you, but it was nice to see something by you again. I kind of felt like it needed more explanation in it, more… story? I’m not sure, it’s hard to think because it is late… So, if I were you, I’d just ignore me! I liked this part though, “My insomnia is a daily reminder, of the empty spaces between my fingers.” it’s a nice, umm, example of your loss? I’m not quite sure how to put that, but the imagery on reading this was amazing. Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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Tempest Member
since 2006-04-28
Posts 247dont eat paint chips!!!! |
yah this piece was really good and i enjoyed it alot. great job on graduating.that must be cool. later ~tempest~ |
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