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an extension of my will is my friend
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an extension of my will is my friend |
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gozaggss Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 33 |
I’ve shaken the witness My life is 100% truthless I have them eating from my trembling, callused palm They look up, wipe their mouths, they look at me calm Believed everything I said, I think My word’s a faucet, their mind’s a sink They return later to continue the feast Like carrion crows, they’re all just ravenous beasts They don’t care whether it’s alive or dead They just eat eat eat until all has been said On my behalf, I think I’ve run out of lies To tell the crows, my friends, I’m all out of sighs To use and pause as I think of a solution To questions that I made full of pollution Contaminated with my lies they look nearly pristine Except for that little chip in the glass at the edge of the screen That’s where I hide my lies, the truth is finally out I give up. To the rood I do shout I’m a liar, a thief and not a great kin A politician, a senator, an Emperor, and a sin It’s a tragedy that I should have met you I ruin lives, not save them, I am the anti-glue That breaks people apart, not brings them together You thought I saved a relationship. I did it as a personal endeavor To test my power over the race of mankind To alter people, to control them, and all with my mind I am not the good-hearted, savior you have proclaimed I’m just a dictator, a cruel ruler, which I myself have ordained Crowned myself as the ruler of you all You were an extension of my will; a servant always on call I used you like a hunter uses his spear To kill you before you kill me simply out of fear Were you even ever going to kill me? I’m not too sure. I can’t really see Maybe you weren’t my enemy after all I betrayed you anyways; the epicenter of my fall I made a mistake, I won’t do so again. Look! My torso does bend My nose to the floor in apology; can you try again to be my friend? |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
this was awesome. I absolutely loved how you put your words together in this. It was great. can't say that I exactly relate. but this is one of those challenging poems that makes you think. great job.. ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
im speechless. i absolutely LOVE THIS!!!! i loves how you compared everything...like yeah it was awesome |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
One word… WOW! @-->--- |
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rebel~angel Member
since 2006-06-20
Posts 71Iowa USA |
The imagery in this is just amazing. I completely love it, love it, love it! Remember: Tuck your chin, you're going to get hurt, so expect it and be ready. You might as well see it coming. |
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lace_of_light Junior Member
since 2006-08-02
Posts 44 |
hey gozaggss i love this! it's so captivating! the imagry is awesome! keep up the good work "areyouinorareyouout? eitherwayyoucan'twin." he said. "butthefallwillbefantasticandwhat'sleftisnothinglessthanperfection" |
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broken_smile1469 Member
since 2006-07-02
Posts 104 |
i LOVED this poem, its probably one of the best i've read here. Great Job!! |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
Amazing!! |
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hunnie_girl
since 2006-06-18
Posts 2567Canada |
this was really good...i liked how you managed to capture everything in one sentence at a time.....i'll look out for more of your work. Krysti* A true friend is someone who reaches for your hand and touches your |
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gozaggss Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 33 |
if ur looking for more, ull prolly have to look back kinda far. been posting on a different poetry site lately |
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