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Deserved Ending
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Deserved Ending |
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juj1 Junior Member
since 2006-05-08
Posts 22Laval Quebec Ca |
Night and day cry in fight every single way The shattering glass that lives within us all, Admits the fascinating sights of the pouring decay Stands a whispering wind planning everyday fall, Through the trees and sees of our lifelong adventure Pleasantry delights wither away through fated roles, Yet it now seems the means to gain a wealthy stature Has embezzled the place of light and true-love spoils, Silently fading in the beauty of a never-ending rain A horizon forgotten by the sunlight brilliantly cruel, Echoes from shadows who strived in torturing pain Convert our everyday world into a brand new jewel. Our broken world finally twirled by surprising entities Towards a new life emptied of hearts hurt by sadness, A given ending by evil abandoning its several identities Will we tarnish our last hope offered to gain happiness? Black and white forever keep in track a colourless sight With the bloodshed of pointless comrades for territory, This war playing game with a devastating ending incite None stop a forsaken world of its man-created cruelty, A broken toy let loose to destroy nature so precious Beautiful landscapes disappear by the hands of fate, Darkish paint covering the works of a saint conscious Of the growing purgatory set by our mankind in hate, A poisonous venom that is called freedom spreads along Reasoning tainted with greed and never-ending calamity, Few survive the greenish drive conceived by the wrong Swallowing through its path what was once named lovely. A brand new awakening fading once again to the unknown But these results matter no more for a divinity kneeled in tears, Uncountable centuries pass and watching what’s been shown The end we deserve for destroying a world once freed of all fears. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
very deep.. i loved it.. you're critique says. "what messages have you understood.." well.. I could tell you but there's so much in this that'd i'd probably have to go back and read it again and determine exactly what I thought. I wasn't prepared to write down my understanding of my feelings when I posted a reply lol.. I'll get around to it.. i promise. not sure when but i'll tell you what this poem spoke to me about.. great job.. by the way.. this was awesome.. it takes a very concentrated mind to write like this.. someone who can dig down deep for all the right words.. keep it up..  ~heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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