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Teen Poetry #7

Sweet intoxication

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

0 posted 2006-06-02 02:53 PM

I don't know
where to begin
I've gotten myself
In such a sin

The power one man
Has over a girl like me
Is greater than 1000 troops
Against one small army

Sweet seduction
Twisted intoxication
The number of times its happened
Is a large approximation

I can't get myself
To pull my body away
His power over me, it seems,
Is definitely here to stay

*sigh*

buttercupbaby
Member

since 2006-05-03

Posts 400
outside in the rain

1 posted 2006-06-02 03:35 PM

wow...you got that into the right words...its almost like, you can read it fast, but it has a HUGE effect on you...i know it did on me...great job.

xox
-missy

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

2 posted 2006-06-02 03:46 PM

thank you!

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

3 posted 2006-06-03 10:15 PM

Sweet seduction
Twisted intoxication

wow, Wow, WOW!! This was wonderful.. these two lines above were so.... good that.. IDK but it was great.. I love when people kinda use oxymorons like :sweet seduction: that is great.. and it added to the poem a lot.. keep up the good work.. I loved it..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

4 posted 2006-06-03 10:56 PM

thank you!!!

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