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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533
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The waves gently overlap the sand They flow just short of where she stands The ocean breeze blows through her light brown hair As she stands on the shore and enjoys the warm air She walks slowly with no place to go A young man wastes no time to say Hello She looks at him deeply into his eyes He grabs her hand and they gaze at the sky The sunset is beautiful its just about done They say goodbye to the bright and warm sun Hand in hand they walk along the rocky ocean shore She looked so wonderful he could not resist anymore He turned to her and placed his hands on her hips Then romantically closed the gap between their lips Such a small and short, but passionate kiss She wonders if shes just imagining this Theres something about the ocean breeze Thats enough to bring one to his knees Love is rekindled and love is found On the soft and sandy, ocean shore ground random poem i wrote |
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pullingxthextrigger Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133MA,..USA llx |
what can i possiably say about this poem??? it rox sox!! i loved it so much!!! i think this is the BEST one you've ever done. I can picture everything in my mind as i was reading this. you are a great talented poet. keep it up ~nora<3 your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong llx - P!ATD! |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
thank you : ) |
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cherrys_rule Member
since 2006-03-18
Posts 442 |
OMG! this is exactly how me and my boyfriend met. ON the beach, just enjoying life and then out of no where he came up to me and that's how we met. Such a great poem. I loved it. Now i have to tell my b/f about this poem. Keep writng. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
thats cool! good luck with the bf ; ) |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
hey bekahlekah45, Now i know i did miss this one! Even if i had read it i would have at least told you how much i enjoyed it. Except for i see the date on it and realize i was out of town, sorry for not commenting any sooner than this. Even though you say this is a random poem you wrote, it has so many emotions in it for me. Unlike some of us i didn't meet my bf on the beach, but it used to be one of our special places to go. I believe you capture the moment, the emotions, in this just right. It was such a pleasure to read for me and I hope you will continue posting "random" poems. Thanks for sharing  @-->--- |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
thank you stargal! |
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Foreverone8783 Junior Member
since 2006-05-29
Posts 24Illinios |
OMG, I really really loved this poem. It was so sweet. It kinda made me jealous of a love like that, but really it is an excellent poem for something you randomly wrote. Great Job! |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
thanks! |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
This was AMAZING.. I'm beginning to really like you as a poet.. and believe me.. if I say that I really like your work and you're one of my favs on the site then you might as well smile bc I don't say it too often.. I loved this.. so sweet and romantic.. the last stanza pulled it all together.. GREAT GREAT job.. ~Heather ps- going in my library. Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
haha why thank you. lol |
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