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aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

0 posted 2006-05-23 08:19 PM

The sun and the moon
The stars in the sky
All above within my eyes

The rose and the tulip
The daffodils in the garden
All around within my hands

The love and the hope
The joy of seeing you
All placed within my heart

For I Love You

even in the worst of it I still have hope and in the best I hold on and let go when its time.

Fabiani
Member

since 2006-05-12

Posts 123
Mesa, Az

1 posted 2006-05-23 08:27 PM

its simple but conveys the meaning very well great poem ^_^~

Aim-DuWerdestBrachen
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Yup YuP~

Sweetpali08
Junior Member

since 2006-05-07

Posts 40

2 posted 2006-05-24 12:19 PM

Nice................

"How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!"
~Paradise now

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-05-29 02:38 AM

Hey Aliway,

I'm going to be honest, when i first read this i was like "huh?", maybe it's because i'm tired, maybe not... Anyway, i read this again and i realized where you were coming from, how this whole poem tied together, and... I like it, it's something so much more different than anything you have ever written, or that i have ever read by you.

It's short, it's sweet, and very enjoyable read. Thanks for sharing this with us, it has my vote

Sorry i haven't posted on this one sooner.

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aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

4 posted 2006-06-12 07:01 PM

All of you, thank you
It is different from my others but I think I like it better that way.
Well thank you

*Leah

WaterFairy103
Member

since 2006-05-31

Posts 196

5 posted 2006-06-13 09:38 PM

I like this one, it has a LOT of symbolism in it. I like the line "All above within my eyes", it was very...mystic. Good job! Someone's very lucky to have you love them so much!

Dance like nobody's watching,
Love like you've never been hurt.
Sing like nobody's listening,
and Live like it's Heaven on Earth.

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

6 posted 2006-06-13 10:06 PM

thank you WaterFairy103
i do love my mom a lot. i write this for her on mothers day, she loved it.

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