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Running From Lost |
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Peach Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 33 |
I leave one place to be in another yet somehow I'm still stuck I only think of what I'm leaving behind and I guess it's just my luck One place is always lacking and the other will always be too I look forward but then step back never quite sure of what to do I don't know what I am running from and I don't know where this will lead I don't know what I am running to or what it is I think I need So then I try to just stand still but everything spins around me I close my eyes and tune it out but lost I continue to be If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I liked this very much.. though I feel like it started strong and then went down at the end.. the ending could have been a little stronger with a little bit more "sting" if you know what I mean.. it's like the thing that when you read it it makes you want to cry and say awww. and I loved and OMG! all at one time.. I believe that this poem was leading up to that "sting" but it just didn't happend. but this is JMHO really.. others' may think differently.. I loved your choice of words.. Maybe I'll here more out of you more often..  ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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Sweetpali08 Junior Member
since 2006-05-07
Posts 40 |
I loved this. You sound soo confused. But yet know what you want in life. Keeep it coming "How are they the VICTIMS if they are the OCCUPIERS?!" |
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