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electricxheart
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2006-05-05 09:28 PM

what have we been hiding from?
the light in one another’s eyes
we know we want this
we know
we've known
the love, we've been searching
for this kind of love
why can't you reach out
just a little bit more then before
underneath, we're afraid
to make that move
into one another's arms
i'm holding out for you
yeah, i'm holding this out for you

cause i've been falling and falling
into this unknown grace
and all i see is your face
tripping and stumbling along the path
in this place
of my own trembling fear
to find out who we truly are
right here, right here

please just come and make your home
in my heart
for you to be a part of me
we know we want this
we know
we've known this from the start
the love, we've been searching
for this kind of love
so long, too long
we’ve waited

why are you still waiting?
cause i’m still holding this out for you
yeah, for you
don’t want to weigh this down
but my smile’s real tonight
and my heart keeps dancing
within the presence of the moon’s light

and i've been falling and falling
into this unknown grace
and all i see is your face
tripping and stumbling along the path
in this place
of my own trembling fear
to find out who we truly are
right here, right here

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-05-05 11:42 PM

"and i've been falling and falling
into this unknown grace
and all i see is your face
tripping and stumbling along the path
in this place
of my own trembling fear
to find out who we truly are
right here, right here"

I loved this poem.. the organization was not all there on this but that was ok.. it made perfectly good sense.. wow.. I love this last stanza.. perfect ending to me..
great job..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

sins_and_tragedies
Junior Member

since 2006-04-26

Posts 41
england

2 posted 2006-05-06 11:12 AM

"please just come and make your home
in my heart
for you to be a part of me
we know we want this
we know
we've known this from the start
the love, we've been searching
for this kind of love
so long, too long
we’ve waited" that by far is one of your best poems

going to library if that ok?
kepp it up

sat
xx

is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

3 posted 2006-05-06 02:48 PM

Hey electricxheart,

The only thing on this, like Heather said, would be the organization, it's not ... umm, it's not as organized as it could be?lol..

My favorite part would have to be,

"
why are you still waiting?
cause i’m still holding this out for you
yeah, for you
don’t want to weigh this down
but my smile’s real tonight
and my heart keeps dancing
within the presence of the moon’s light"

very beautiful, and also capturing, luring you into reading more, and more, and more... if only there was that much more!

Good job on this one, I can't wait to see what you come up with next

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