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mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

0 posted 2006-05-04 08:57 PM

Once upon a time
in a land far away
way up in a castle
beneath skies of dark gray

A beautiful princess
alone with her tears
awaiting prince charming
"Come demolish my fears"

Guarded by her dragon
a life built on lies
scarred with emotions
seen clear in her eyes

Always waiting in the dark
for that one special man
the one to spend forever
holding her fragile hand

Silly girl so full of hope
smiles, and lots of laughter
doesn't seem to know
there'll be no happy ever after

[This message has been edited by mgoodman1989 (05-06-2006 05:37 PM).]

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

1 posted 2006-05-04 09:19 PM

no idea what you could name it. but i thought this was a cute little poem. good job.

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

2 posted 2006-05-05 12:01 PM

k, this poem is AWESOME!!! i loved it but

Silly girl so full of hope
smiles, and lots of laughter
doesn't seem to know
there'll be no happy ever after

that was my fave stanza
im so adding this to my library
keep up the great work

~nora<3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD!

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

3 posted 2006-05-05 12:03 PM

o yea and for the name maybe you could name it "No happy ever after" or "Once Upon a time" i dont know..but sumthing along those lines

~nora <3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD!

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

4 posted 2006-05-05 12:06 PM

lovely write.... it reminds me of the LADY OF SHALLOT.. that was another master piece

Love me for who i m

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-05-05 08:30 PM

Hey mgoodman,

Really, really good poem, true, not one of my favorites by you, but still very good.

I was thinking "Dark Gray" for the name, sounds kind of wierd, i know, but i kind of like it...

Good luck on thinking something up though, it is so hard for me to find titles for my poems that a lot of them are just "untitled", hope this one won't be like that

@-->---

mgoodman1989
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 93
Iowa, USA

6 posted 2006-05-06 07:38 PM

Thanks everyone for the ideas and comments

Junebug
Junior Member

since 2006-04-23

Posts 40
earth

7 posted 2006-05-07 05:27 AM

ok totally awesome....and i totally get it....um...i like the name you got....it works...lol

John O'Driscoll
Junior Member

since 2006-03-13

Posts 43
Sandy, Utah

8 posted 2006-06-16 09:48 PM

Hey i really liked this. In all the old school fairytales you see everywhere all you see is a handsome dashing prince rescuing a beautiful princess. They dont want to focus on an innocent girl being locked in a tower for the rest of her life, because its not a pleasant thought. Really good! totally loved it!

jOhN

P.S. I just posted a couple of new poems and i'd love to hear what you think of them!

True happiness is found after you think you have irretrievably lost it

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