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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2006-05-03 04:22 PM

Whimsical In Blue and Gray

There’s nothing better than a heart attack in the middle
Of a moment of importance.
Open mouthed, gaping, as though some thought
Has struck like lightning through ones’ core.
We are all brilliant in impending death,
A self-proclaimed genius in the after-life,
Or rather, the subject of idiots.
No one is noble with the coldest blue
Applied like whorish cosmetics,
But they will still ply our hands into
A symbol of rest, as if anyone
Sleeps
In such an awkward position.
I just want to scream “at ease soldier”
And “drop and give me 50” when no response comes.
How cruel to mock the dead, you say.
I say how cruel it is for the dead
To mock
The living
In casual pose and posthumous prose.
I have gone too far now.
End.

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

1 posted 2006-05-03 05:09 PM

The first time I read this silently to myself.. i didn't get it at first.. but then... I read it to myslef outloud.. and everything you were saying fell right into place.. this was a great piece by you.. I love your choice of words and the topic that you chose.. great job..

You always write beautifully.. especially poems that make you think.

~heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

pullingxthextrigger
Member

since 2006-05-01

Posts 133
MA,..USA llx

2 posted 2006-05-03 06:43 PM

very very nice. like heather said u write beautifully keep it up

~nora <3

your pulling the trigger, pulling the trigger all wrong </3 llx - P!ATD!

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2006-05-04 04:02 PM

again thank you for reading. i am in england right now and have seen a great deal for inspiration i suppose

Kaos
Member

since 2001-08-02

Posts 317
between space and time

4 posted 2006-05-07 08:24 PM

good piece... enjoyed the imagery alot

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by: Me. (posted in Dark Poetry)

loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

5 posted 2006-06-26 09:08 PM

Again...i love it its dark, its expressive, its in plain black and white, but for feeble minds it seems complex (sry if anyone who reads this didnt understand it lol) I am officially in love with your poetry...

"when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join them in a mutual weirdness and call it love-true love"

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