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young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2003-09-23 09:33 PM

a white washed room is empty
so solitary in its existance.
there is no movement, not even a sound,
but the things that will come explode the scene.

a white washed heart is empty of all,
it knows not what pain is.
theres never been an introduction to hurt,
but this poor soul will quickly thrive on sorrow.

a white washed mouth is soon soiled
with words meant for dirty deeds.
the syllyllables destroy preciousness
and shred innocense with y seeds.

a white washed room and heart
are now filled with y tears.
the pain oozes over all the surfaces,
transforming it into a beautiful sadness of years.

a red hued room now buzzes
with clammering from broken peices.
a red tinted heart now meets,
a new friend in merciless pain.

Olive_8
Junior Member

since 2003-09-20

Posts 41
Canada

1 posted 2003-09-23 09:55 PM

Very very interesting, it made me think back to the time before i was ever hurt by love, before my heart knew such deep pain. Very well done, I love it!

aussie teen
Member

since 2003-09-27

Posts 396
Australia

2 posted 2003-09-27 06:22 AM

this is an excellent poem. the amount of feelings it brings out in readers and the amount of feelings you put into this poem is great. keep up your writing.

Why
Junior Member

since 2003-09-26

Posts 32
Middle of nowhere

3 posted 2003-09-27 11:30 AM

im speachless.....beautiful

shara
Member

since 2002-05-21

Posts 69
florida/USA

4 posted 2003-10-02 03:10 PM

so profound yet so easily understood, i think it's safe to say that we all had that innocent point, then we are subjected to the
agony of pain and hurt, then we deal with it through our writing. thanx for the great write, keep em' comin'. be blessed
sha-sha

Kandi
Member

since 2000-06-14

Posts 354
North of Hell

5 posted 2003-10-02 04:18 PM

VERY well done...one of the best I've read around here for awhile.
Excellent job.
"Innocence cannot be lost...it just needs to be maintained."
-Kristin

Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me.
So call me Captain Backfire.

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

6 posted 2003-10-03 12:33 PM

white washed....sometimes its neccisary. good write.

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

7 posted 2003-10-03 04:11 PM

thanks alot for the feedback gusy, check out my others please!!

loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

8 posted 2006-06-26 09:38 PM

I'LL TOTALLY FRIGGIN READ THE REST OF 'EM BABY!

"when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join them in a mutual weirdness and call it love-true love"

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