Teen Poetry #7 |
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sins_and_tragedies Junior Member
since 2006-04-26
Posts 41england |
Don't mention where you've been or where you want to go. Don't tell me 'bout all your sins 'cause I don't want to know. I tried to give you everything but all I got was nothing in return. Maybe I try too hard and it don't seem fair I keep telling myself: Who needs somebody like you? I don't need somebody to waste my time. Who needs somebody like you? Someone like me no matter how hard I try. You got your life and that's a fact but I got my dignity. You may be happy with the way things are but that ain't working for me. I don't ask for perfection but I've got to know did you ever really care? May be you are just a dream that won't come true I keep telling myself: Who needs somebody like you?... Who needs somebody like you?... I don't need nobody to tell me lies. Who needs somebody like you? Someone like me And now I'm wondering why. I keep comin' back 'til I can't take no more. Who needs somebody like you? I don't need nobody to waste my time. ... Who needs somebody like you? I don't need nobody to tell my lies. ... is good to face this things with a sense of poise and rationality |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, I really, really, liked this poem! The only thing was that i thought the organization was kind of wierd, like where you put breaks for stanzas and stuff, and also the grammar, there are a few things in it that do not sound right. Although, my all time favorite lines in this have got to be, "Don't mention where you've been or where you want to go. Don't tell me 'bout all your sins 'cause I don't want to know" that part is just awesome! Keep writing, i'd love to see more if their as good as what i've read so far ![]() @-->--- |
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