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sins_and_tragedies
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since 2006-04-26
Posts 41
england

0 posted 2006-04-28 12:07 PM


Born from silence, silence full of it
A perfect concert my best friend
So much to live for, so much to die for
If only my heart had a home

Sing what you can't say
Forget what you can't play
Hasten to drown into beautiful eyes
Walk within my poetry, this dying music
- My loveletter to nobody

Never sigh for better world
It's already composed, played and told
Every thought the music I write
Everything a wish for the night

Wrote for the eclipse, wrote for the virgin
Died for the beauty the one in the garden
Created a kingdom, reached for the wisdom
Failed in becoming a god

Never sigh for better world
It's already composed, played and told
Every thought the music I write
Everything a wish for the night
Teach me passion for I fear it's gone
Show me love, hold the lorn
So much more I wanted to give to the ones who love me
I'm sorry
Time will tell
this bitter farewell
I live no more to shame nor me nor you

And you... I wish I didn't feel for you anymore...

A lonely soul... An ocean soul...




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Kaos
Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
1 posted 2006-04-29 03:28 PM


First i would like to applaud you. This was absolutely awesome!

"Walk within my poetry, this dying music
- My loveletter to nobody


Wrote for the eclipse, wrote for the virgin
Died for the beauty the one in the garden
Created a kingdom, reached for the wisdom
Failed in becoming a god"

these lines in particular gave me shivers. Awesome piece, welcome to my library with this one lol good job

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by:  Me.  (posted in Dark Poetry)

Kaos
Member
since 2001-08-02
Posts 317
between space and time
2 posted 2006-04-29 03:28 PM


First i would like to applaud you. This was absolutely awesome!

"Walk within my poetry, this dying music
- My loveletter to nobody


Wrote for the eclipse, wrote for the virgin
Died for the beauty the one in the garden
Created a kingdom, reached for the wisdom
Failed in becoming a god"

these lines in particular gave me shivers. Awesome piece, welcome to my library with this one lol good job

Life is a torment and torment an enigma. So burn the shackles of slavery and let love run free
-" Slave of Love" by:  Me.  (posted in Dark Poetry)

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-04-29 07:09 PM


Wow... This poem is so amazing!
The words, the imagery, the thoughts, everything holds you spell bound in this, from the moment you start to read to the moment you stop...

My particular favorite part of this poem would have to be,

"Sing what you can't say
Forget what you can't play"


that and also the first stanza, both parts amazing and unique!

Great job on this

@-->---

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
4 posted 2006-04-30 10:11 PM


wow... going in my library... I loved all of it.. everything in this was amazing.. you have talent.. and you put plenty of emotion in your poetry.. "love letter to nobody"  again. wow!

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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