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Peach Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 33 |
I am stuck in this spot not knowing what's going on I keep trying to get out but I don't know where to go how can I run away if I don't know where I am? don't want to be here don't know how to leave it's like an endless stream of unanswerable questions a map with no destinations I don't know if my eyes are open or closed am I deaf or just hearing things? is someone with me or am I alone? anger, torment, sadness and rage someone pay the ransom or could I just escape? am I even being held captive or could I walk right out the door? I scream out loud I beg, I plea but no one comes to my rescue because everyone is trapped like me they're trapped in realization If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Okay, so I can relate to this poem A LOT! Even though I felt like the rhyming was kind of blah, I enjoyed this because it felt like me writing? Make sense? No! … all well… Only suggestion from me would be stanzas, it would help a little bit to organize the poem better, and also help the reader be able to read  Thanks for sharing this poem with me, it really made my day to see someone write about something I’m feeling at the moment… Hope to see more from you! @-->--- |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
PS - loved the name of this poem, it fit it all so well! @-->--- |
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Peach Junior Member
since 2002-11-17
Posts 33 |
Thanks for the reply...I really appreciate it...I didn't actually mean to have any rhyme scheme in this one at all, it just happened a little at the end there. It was kinda just like random ramblings going on in my head that I just continued to write down without any kind of formality or anything, and this was the result. If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
well, it might have just been random thoughts, but i loved this poem! Thanks so much for posting it @-->--- |
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