Teen Poetry #7 |
drowning |
kissa~rachelle Senior Member
since 2003-11-27
Posts 988nowhere special |
im drowning in these thoughts of you. i cant get up for air. im drowning in these thoughts of you. it really isnt fair. your eyes burn into me what a suffocating stare your thoughts penetrate me i feel naked and bare. too bad you dont care. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
ok...I LOVE this.... it doesn't even need to be any longer...it's got a nice zinger on the end of it too....well done |
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Junebug Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40earth |
OK that poem totally rocks!! its so awesome! and the words you used all worked together! but ya totally awesome! |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
excellent! just like me... short and sweet and point got across~ |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
WOW!!! I can really relate to this. All the words you used and how you used them all works awsomely together. Love this. Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Okay, so basicly everyone else has said everything you need to hear, let me just say i agree, i love this poem! and even though this is perfect and it doesn't need to be longer, it would still be neat if it was Umm, i don't really know what to say, except that this was an amazing write... @-->--- |
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