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My anti-love
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My anti-love |
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Junebug Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40earth |
Your non-stop lies, Your piercing eyes, Your constant yelling Its just to over whelming. Every hateful thing you've said, Just cant get it out of my head, You keep me on my toes, watching my back, I cant relax or just sit back. I watch every word i say But i keep saying stuff to make you stay. When your around i only hurt, Cause every word you speak, makes me feel like dirt. My insperation, and shining star, the opposite of everything you are. Nothing about you is what i dreamed of, Everything about you...Is my anti-love! so uh..tell me whatcha think please! |
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intention Member
since 2005-11-13
Posts 59New Delhi, INDIA |
hey i like ya posts... soemthing like me .... Love me for who i m |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
good first post it works well |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Nice first post June. It flows well and is pretty organized. Very well writen. Good job. Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Umm, yah, pretty much what everyone else said... The only thing was where you are like "... is my anti-love!", i felt like that part lost a little bit of the flow, but that's just me, and what do i know? nothing! lol Great first post like everyone said, and idk if i've said this yet so... welcome to pip! hope to see more from you  @-->--- |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
this is absoloutly fantastic! it's everything many have gone through and you have described it well welcome and thankyou, smiles, me! i'm looking for you...always... |
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