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kissa~rachelle
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since 2003-11-27
Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2006-04-22 05:08 AM



nightmares come
nightmares go.
just like the wind
that doesnt always blow.
my life is put
on hold.
for what you ask?
i do not know.
for love?
for hate?
to resolve my fate?
it isnt that simple.
it isnt that slow.
this feeling i get....
ive never had it before.

eh. i dont like this one so much.

© Copyright 2006 Karissa - All Rights Reserved
Junebug
Junior Member
since 2006-04-23
Posts 40
earth
1 posted 2006-04-23 01:05 AM


I Do!! the words are awesome! it rocks in my opinion!
tearsoflove13762
Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent
2 posted 2006-04-24 01:20 AM


the meaning and most of the wording works but some rearranging and changing of words is what it needs
stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
3 posted 2006-05-01 03:04 PM


Hey,

I disagree, i don't think there needs to be any moving around of words, or lines.

I felt like this had great flow, except for the last line, something about that just didn't go over smoothly with me...

Great poem though, i know i enjoyed reading it, thinking about it, maybe even reading more into this than what you meant to be put in it... all well

Keep up the good writes

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pullingxthextrigger
Member
since 2006-05-01
Posts 133
MA,..USA llx
4 posted 2006-05-01 05:59 PM


nightmares come
nightmares go.
just like the wind
that doesnt always blow.

fave stanza..this poem is great!  loved it   short n' sweet <3  keep up the great work!

Mick Hawkes
Member
since 2000-10-26
Posts 90
Tees-side , England
5 posted 2006-06-13 07:24 PM


I Liked this ...

Never take life too seriously - None of us gets out alive!

silhouetted
Senior Member
since 2004-01-30
Posts 537
New Zealand
6 posted 2006-06-16 03:15 AM


i like this its reallt relative!
ooh haven't spoken to u in ages!
your writing is still as great
i havent been able to write in ages ohwell im here to try again! damn writers block

can you find me space inside your bleeding heart?

girlskater117
Junior Member
since 2006-06-06
Posts 32

7 posted 2006-06-16 09:01 AM


I like it alot. I hope u read mine but u don't have too
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