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happiness? |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533
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Just when I think that things are going good Something happens that i never though would It seems happiness only stays for a bit Then a little while later i'm back in the pits I like to be an optimist I can't stand being sad So when these hard times happen I get so frustrated, so mad I need to be patient and give these things time and realize that crying really isnt a crime! Happiness is something I have to decide to be So i need to swipe the frown off my face and just be happy. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, First of all let me apologize for not posting sooner, it is my own stupid fault, so don't feel like everyone out there doesn't care about this post. Okay, on to the poem! Liked it a lot, something different by you, which is kewl, cause i know a lot of writers like to write about certain things only, i'm glad that you can be flexible, shows that you have a lot of talent! You have like one spelling error on the first stanza, the "though" i thought was really "thought"? Am i right on this? The last stanza i felt like it didn't measure up to the standard of the other stanzas, it was like a weight dragging the poem down towards the end, no offence. So, that was like my least favorite stanza of all... The second from the last stanza? My favorite, something about that really stood out to me! Good job on this poem, and i am sorry i haven't posted sooner on this, i saw it, just never took the time to read it... @-->--- |
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bekahlekah45 Senior Member
since 2006-03-14
Posts 533 |
hey no problem..yeah its thought. i caught that after the 24 hours though so i wasnt able to fix it sorry!! but thanks for the post! |
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