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Teenage life. |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
Teenage life. Teenage life, is it all it’s cracked up to be? It’s going through so much pain in such a short space It’s trying to find you, in all of the mess Teenage life it’s such strife. Don’t know if these feelings are right Don’t believe this should be a part of life. Don’t know if these feelings, Have enough meaning I do not know of I should let them out For I am not sure what they are about. I express who I am to some And try to let out the pain But why do you look at me like I’m going insane. I try to be who I am, I try to express who I am, I try to let you see who I am. But how can I do this, If I don’t know who I am yet, If I don’t know if these feelings are here to stay. I don’t know if they are a part of me, I’m just trying to be… A teenage girl. But I don’t think its working. (this is probably the worst poems i have ever written but it consists of a lot of feeling of which i would like for you to give me some feedback on. thankyou) |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
It does have a lot of feeling in it. Thats good. It could have had more organization put into it. Maybe the same amount of lines each time or something. Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I think that lots of people have feelings like these, not only teenagers! Umm... Yes, sorry, wasn't your best poem, but it got out what you wanted to say, no? Don't worry, your not alone out there, i have these feelings also! Just hang in there  @-->--- |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
I agree with them. Every one has these problems; if you don’t then you’re just weird. I mean you’ve heard my problems before, and all those started in my teens, and more. Your right its not one hove your best but you emotion is felt and that is what really maters. *leah |
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dramaticaddict Junior Member
since 2006-04-13
Posts 10ny, usa |
i seem to feel the same way and i love how you put it "It’s going through so much pain in such a short space" ^^definitely my fav line you really have a talent... so maybe this wasnt your absolute best... but i still loved it. <3cassie. |
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