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BlackEyedBueaty07
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since 2006-04-05
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0 posted 2006-04-12 05:59 PM


Once and For All

By: Kerry
To: Ashley L.

We've been through it
We've been through it all
All the fights
All of them
All

I never thought we'd fight
But at the looks of it
We are

Not talking
Not paying attention
It's different
And not very exciting.

Yeah i knew one day we wouldnt be friends
But i didnt mean it to totally break and bend

And as that day went on
I knew it was gonna end
But through this all
I finally see

The most of this time
You still wanted me
To be your friend
To hang out.

But your friends are holding you back now.

But fine listen to them all
I just wanted to be your friend once and for all...


© Copyright 2006 kerry lynn cookro - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-04-12 08:24 PM


Nice. All I can really sugest is to have the same number of lines each section. It would look nicer and might be easyer to read.

                 Jessica

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