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It's You
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It's You |
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xox.ice.cream.lover.xox Junior Member
since 2006-01-07
Posts 20Canada |
You've broken my heart Many times before And yet, it's still you That I love and adore I've sworn to forget you Told myself I didn't care But still, somehow, In my heart you're always there Maybe I'm scared Of dreaming yet another fantasy Maybe I'm scared That again, it's just me 'Cause it's you I'm so drawn to It's been you from the start 'Cause it's you that's my sunshine It's you that has my heart. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Simple and sweet.. I loved it.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Again, like heather said... waaaait! I seem to be copying Heather all the time in my comments... lol Okay, I love this poem, I LOVE your style, although you might think/get tired of/having your poems called simple, i think that is the best way to describe them! I loved the whole poem, the only thing that i thought was a little off was the flow, nothing very big, just if you read through it in a couple spots it is a little stiff. Although, my favorites lines have really got to be, "I've sworn to forget you Told myself I didn't care But still, somehow, In my heart you're always there" I love that part, i can relate to it in many ways. Keep writing, i'd love to see more! @-->--- |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
I really like it. It's short and sweet. I don't know about the simple calling thing that stargal brought up though. It flowed extremely well. Very well organized also. It's one of the BEST poems I've read today. It's definitely going in to my library favorites. Jessica |
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