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xox.ice.cream.lover.xox
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since 2006-01-07
Posts 20
Canada

0 posted 2006-04-11 10:13 PM



Wrapped up in confusion
Things aren't what they seem...
And I really don't know
Just what to believe

I guess we're just friends
But why do i feel more?
It never did end...
And I guess it's still her.

So many feelings
I'm dying to show
So many things
I want you to know

Maybe one day
I'll tell you the truth
Maybe one day
I'll say I love you.

© Copyright 2006 Sabrina R. - All Rights Reserved
the_girl_next_door
Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
1 posted 2006-04-11 10:54 PM


Again this was a very simple poem.. but you showed a lot of emotion... the first line.. was my favorite..keep it up..
~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
2 posted 2006-04-12 09:39 AM


Wow! Even though there was no big fancy words, no great show, this was an awesome poem. I love every single stanza, except maybe the second one, it just doesn't seem to stand out to me as much.

I love how you can take such "simple" words and turn them into a beautiful flowing poem.

My favorite stanza is,

"So many feelings
I'm dying to show
So many things
I want you to know"


Good job, I would love to see more

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