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One Day |
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xox.ice.cream.lover.xox Junior Member
since 2006-01-07
Posts 20Canada |
Wrapped up in confusion Things aren't what they seem... And I really don't know Just what to believe I guess we're just friends But why do i feel more? It never did end... And I guess it's still her. So many feelings I'm dying to show So many things I want you to know Maybe one day I'll tell you the truth Maybe one day I'll say I love you. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Again this was a very simple poem.. but you showed a lot of emotion... the first line.. was my favorite..keep it up.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! Even though there was no big fancy words, no great show, this was an awesome poem. I love every single stanza, except maybe the second one, it just doesn't seem to stand out to me as much. I love how you can take such "simple" words and turn them into a beautiful flowing poem. My favorite stanza is, "So many feelings I'm dying to show So many things I want you to know" Good job, I would love to see more @-->--- |
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