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curiouse
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since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england

0 posted 2006-04-10 08:52 AM


delete me from your life
delete me from your past
delete me from your future
delete me from your mobile
delete me from you email adress book

pretend i never happened.
pretend i never came into your life,
pretend we never came together on that night.

delete me from you mind
delete me from your body
delete me from you soul

tidy your bed and pretend i was never there.
Ask your friends never to tell
you how fond they were of me,
ever again.

notify your parents that i will not be coming for eid.
Tell your brother he won't be able to spy on me anymore.

delete me becuase i have deleted you
i have deleted you because i know you have much more to delete
i have deleted you because you need to know that you can only have one  of us.

delete me and you ever happened.

delete it!

[This message has been edited by curiouse (04-11-2006 01:45 PM).]

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curiouse
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since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
1 posted 2006-04-11 01:47 PM


hey guys.
it's not one of the best.
but hey, when you given a paper you have to fill the space, right?
smiles,
me

i'm looking for you...always...

the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
2 posted 2006-04-11 09:07 PM


Hey.. I really liked this.. but.. the last part kind of confused me when you said "you can only have one of us"
and the last two lines also confused me..
overall this was a really neat idea for a poem.. i believe that with alittle polish.. this could be great.. keep it up..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

curiouse
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since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
3 posted 2006-04-12 05:05 AM


yes i think all my poems need a little poloshing.
thanx,
me

i'm looking for you...always...

stargal
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since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352
OR USA
4 posted 2006-04-12 09:52 AM


Hey curiouse,

I just want to say this isn't one of my favorites by you, i love the general idea but this does need a little bit of polish...

Btw, let me know if posting on your poems annoys you, cause i seem to post on yours a lot

I love this part,

"pretend i never happened.
pretend i never came into your life,
pretend we never came together on that night."


Thanks for posting!

@-->---

curiouse
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since 2006-03-21
Posts 277
england
5 posted 2006-04-12 10:28 AM


no you are welcome to post on my poems and thanx for reading them.
when i write my poetry it's normally just bluring out all my feelings on to the screen so i never really see it as a work of poetry just me expressing myself.
i would appreciate it if you would keep posting.
thankyou,
me

i'm looking for you...always...

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6 posted 2006-04-16 11:08 PM


Read this earlier, but didn't want to butt in. It's nice. Organization could be better though.

                 Jessica

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