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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
delete me from your life delete me from your past delete me from your future delete me from your mobile delete me from you email adress book pretend i never happened. pretend i never came into your life, pretend we never came together on that night. delete me from you mind delete me from your body delete me from you soul tidy your bed and pretend i was never there. Ask your friends never to tell you how fond they were of me, ever again. notify your parents that i will not be coming for eid. Tell your brother he won't be able to spy on me anymore. delete me becuase i have deleted you i have deleted you because i know you have much more to delete i have deleted you because you need to know that you can only have one of us. delete me and you ever happened. delete it! [This message has been edited by curiouse (04-11-2006 01:45 PM).] |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
hey guys. it's not one of the best. but hey, when you given a paper you have to fill the space, right? smiles, me i'm looking for you...always... |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Hey.. I really liked this.. but.. the last part kind of confused me when you said "you can only have one of us" and the last two lines also confused me.. overall this was a really neat idea for a poem.. i believe that with alittle polish.. this could be great.. keep it up.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
yes i think all my poems need a little poloshing. thanx, me i'm looking for you...always... |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey curiouse, I just want to say this isn't one of my favorites by you, i love the general idea but this does need a little bit of polish... Btw, let me know if posting on your poems annoys you, cause i seem to post on yours a lot  I love this part, "pretend i never happened. pretend i never came into your life, pretend we never came together on that night." Thanks for posting! @-->--- |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
no you are welcome to post on my poems and thanx for reading them. when i write my poetry it's normally just bluring out all my feelings on to the screen so i never really see it as a work of poetry just me expressing myself. i would appreciate it if you would keep posting. thankyou, me i'm looking for you...always... |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Read this earlier, but didn't want to butt in. It's nice. Organization could be better though. Jessica |
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