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Teen Poetry #7

friends vs best friends

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

0 posted 2006-04-03 09:40 PM

Friends will come, Friends will go
Kind of like the drifting snow-
They come and come and start to pile
Then drift away after awhile

Best friends come but they won't go
Kind of like an arrow with its bow
You can't have one without the other,
They cant survive without each other

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

1 posted 2006-04-03 09:58 PM

i really like it. it could have been longer.... i think it could have been even better longer but its still great.

Jessica

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

2 posted 2006-04-03 10:12 PM

i love it
its great as is, don’t change a thing.

curiouse
Member

since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england

3 posted 2006-04-04 03:50 AM

yes,
this poem is very very good if i do say so myself
i loved it,
curiouse

Curioustity is a fine gift...

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

4 posted 2006-04-04 09:02 AM

Hey,

I really like this poem because it speaks about true things!

The only thing is that i think these lines,

"They come and come and start to pile
Then drift away after awhile"

Do not flow as well as some of the other lines in this poem, but that is just my opinion.

I really like how you compare friends to a bow and arrow, and my favorite line so far (although, it is kind of odd) is

"Friends will come, Friends will go
Kind of like the drifting snow-"

That just really stands out to me!

Thank you so much for showing us this poem, i really, really, enjoyed it.

@-->---

bekahlekah45
Senior Member

since 2006-03-14

Posts 533

5 posted 2006-04-04 03:15 PM

thanks for the comments!!

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