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sometimesitslonely Junior Member
since 2005-12-27
Posts 41USA |
Around here, I've got friends miles wide, around here, I've got a boyfriend to hold me at night. Around here, I've got the highest grades in the school, around here, I dominate most everyone I know. Around here, this town is so sleepy, around here, it's so boring to even be awake. Around here, everyone knows every one, around here, you find a reason not to wake up. This smile is fake, |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, I really liked how this poem started out but I felt like it left you asking for more? Dare I put it that way? I guess I was just a little disapointed, cause i feel like the poem doesn't go anywhere, the ending left something to be desired... I'm sorry, I guess that's just my opinion  @-->--- |
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curiouse Member
since 2006-03-21
Posts 277england |
i'm afraid i agree with stargal |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
I agree with stargal.You could make it better. But I do like what you’re trying to say if I got what you’re saying right. |
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