Teen Poetry #7 |
Old Love Is Still New |
sometimesitslonely Junior Member
since 2005-12-27
Posts 41USA |
I wonder what you're thinking when you're thinking of me, how do you feel, what girl do you see? Did you paint me in colors, of beauty and in light? Do you think you missed out because we feel in love so young? Do you see my gray hairs? Do you wish I was someone else? When we still dance to our old songs, do you feel the spark? It's been sixty years since I first met you, fifth grade was so horrible, thank you for saving me, my one true love. This smile is fake, |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
i loved the concept of this poem it was great.. It's like a fairytale.. not many people at all will ever marry someone they new in the fifth grade and still be with them til they get old. loved your piece. Keep it up.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! When i first started reading this i thought, "oh, another love poem gone wrong", but i was sooo wrong! This was such a great suprise for me. Like heather said, it's almost like a fairy tale. I really enjoyed it. Thank you for sharing @-->--- |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I agree with Heather's comment as well. Nice job! ~Alli~ |
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BlackEyedBueaty07 Junior Member
since 2006-04-05
Posts 27rittman, ohio |
this was very good! keep up the good work! -kerry- i can so relate to this poem |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
it was very nice. i agree with all of you. might have been able to flown a little better i the middle. Jessica |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
It was lovely. Its amazing that you met them in fifth grade and still love them. Its like a dream come true. *leah |
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