Teen Poetry #7 |
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Feel out of place |
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aliway Member
since 2006-03-05
Posts 185With in your eyes |
what would they do? what would they say? if they found out I was afraid that every night I dread the next day but I wish I could say all the things that I feel but as time goes by I get shyer and quiet more out of place would they stay at ease? to hear I won’t give up on my dreams I’ll stay in the fight if it takes all of my might what would they do? what would they say? if they found out I was afraid that I fear every day I know I’m not alone those others feel the same feeling lost from it all but it doesn’t do any good I still feel out of place I wish they would see that I’m reaching out for some help I’m sick of these feeling I just won’t to yell at them all |
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latteaddict213![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Its very good. Deep. had to read it twice before i got it but thats probaly just me. Jessica |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I agree with Jessica this was a very deep piece but some of the word phrasing (the way you worded some of the stanzas) confused me and I had to reread it.. other than that this was a great poem. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
I have to agree with everyone else, it is a little bit confusing to read! I enjoyed reading it though, good job ![]() @-->--- |
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