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Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

0 posted 2006-03-10 01:01 AM

Shivers when will my life change?
when will it stop feeling strange?
when will it go away?
when will I have the right of way?
when will I finally find a light that can light my way?

when can I stand up and say that I've had enough
and ask what I have done to get so caught up and to keep looking back

what does true love mean?
coz if you think about it its sort of like the wind
you cant see it but you can feel it
its like your blind and then it hits you from behind

can people read you face?
can they see what fears you face?
can they say that they know?
and not have any ideas of why they just told you so, when really they have no clue and then you start thinking that they where rude

im blind I have so many questions
but sadly no answers so I will wait
and hopefully find my own way!

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Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-03-10 01:12 AM

Hey,

It’s that annoying person again! 
Yup, that’s me, the spelling cop!

I like your poem a lot though; it has great questions in it about life. I think everyone asks those questions of themselves at certain times in their lives. I’m just glad you found a way to put them into poetry!

Just a thought, from me, and me being me it probably means that it’s a dumb though buuuuut…
The line, “and ask what I have done to get so caught up and to keep looking back”, I myself feel that the “and to keep looking back”, fits. I mean it fits, it just doesn’t flow as easy… but that’s just me.

Great poem! I love most of your posts, but I do tend to get carried away in bashing others when I really need to think about my own work.
So I hope I am not hurting anyone’s feelings in expressing my opinions like a complete fool!

Keep up the good work, I look forward to more posts from you.

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stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

2 posted 2006-03-10 01:14 AM

Wow! i have a lot of spelling errors in my last post... 0ops... hehehe

If that posts makes no sense to you feel free to ask what the *blank* i'm talking about

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Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

3 posted 2006-03-10 02:52 AM

Thanks! Yeah i get you i mean it makes sence ... but it doesnt really fit in....well i dunno. I shore hope it doesnt reck the whole poem

x0x0
Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

4 posted 2006-03-10 05:23 PM

a bit of it confused me. besides that its awsome. none of tht is very helpful...but i cant think of anything else to say. byebye

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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