Teen Poetry #7 |
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He, Him, She, and Me. |
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whatshername New Member
since 2006-03-08
Posts 4ND, USA |
He likes her. She likes that she can flirt with whomever. He tells me that his best friend likes her He asks me if she likes his best friend. I reply, knowing its over. He tells me that he likes her He asks if I think she likes him too. Its really over now. She could, I tell him. He doubts my words. I sigh, its over. We will never be, him and me. She will never see. She wont see that his best friend likes her desperately. She won’t see that he likes her desperately. And… she wont see how I like him desperately.. It will never be… [This message has been edited by whatshername (03-09-2006 09:13 PM).] |
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latteaddict213![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Welcome to Pip! Great first post. Bit confusing, but still Great first post. Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, Okay, i'd have to say i found this really confusing! it wasn't until the end that i figured out what was going on... Just a thought for you, i am very dense at times so it could just be me. Good job though! i like the plot(dare i say poems have plots?). I would love to see more of your work, please continue posting! And don't let my negative comments hold you back ![]() Good luck @-->--- |
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whatshername New Member
since 2006-03-08
Posts 4ND, USA |
Hi, it's supposed to be confused, mostly cause i was confused! i just wanted to know what everyone thought. Thanks for the comments! |
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since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
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