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kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

0 posted 2006-03-02 10:05 PM

they say
a man can only love for so long
until the mans love is gone.

i say
a man can love for so long
and then some more.

they say
a man can be alone for so long.
until the mans mind is gone.

i say
its worth every minute
for you cant be alone forever.

they say
a man can only cry for so long
until the mans heart is gone.

i say
cry all you want
but dont forget where you came from.

they say
a man can only hate for so long
until the mans soul is gone.

i say...
thats true.

yes, i know not very good. but it jsut came out. and if you dont like it...eh. oh well.

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

neil.gd
Junior Member

since 2006-02-27

Posts 16
southern leyte, philippines

1 posted 2006-03-02 11:23 PM

ya...you'r right..

i agree with you..

for souls not buried
there's still love in it

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

2 posted 2006-03-03 06:54 PM

I loved this poem. One of my favorite of yours. I liked how the end you agreed instead of disagreeing like in the other parts. Wonderful surprise and so very true.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

3 posted 2006-03-03 10:23 PM

ilike it. the best poems come out when you least expect it. i totally agree with the other comments very good

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

helenadepp
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 59
durham, england

4 posted 2006-03-04 12:37 PM

I really enjoyed this. It shows that no matter what some may say, men do have feelings too.

*slots in into personal library*

curiouse
Member

since 2006-03-21

Posts 277
england

5 posted 2006-04-04 09:20 AM

this is such an intense poem.
it was fantastin.soooo fantastic
good job,
curiouse

Curioustity is a fine gift...

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

6 posted 2006-04-08 02:42 PM

Great poem
I agree with you about man

*leah

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

7 posted 2006-04-08 04:42 PM

Hey,

I don’t really know what to think about your poem!
I mean I like the general idea of the whole thing, I just feel like it is lacking in rhythm.

I really like how you set this poem up, just makes it an easy to read setting… I’d have to agree with everyone else on how neat the last stanza is.

Hope to see more of your poems

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