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Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

0 posted 2006-03-02 09:32 PM

what do you do when all hope is gone?
when you have slipped away from the last hand that has held you up for so long?
when you know deep inside that all your faith is all gone?
that your fire that kept you going has just stopped glowing?

when you have finally given up all there was?
and your standing on the edge of your boat?
thinking of what went wrong why? and how?
you could of lasted this long

it's all gone and your all alone
no one else's hand for you to hold
no one just you and your soul
what can you do when your last wishing star just faded away?
while you where talking to yourself about your day
trying to get away from your pain
and finding only but yourself to blame
this is really the end
your motor on your boat has just stopped going
so I guess this will be the end of my poem!!!

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Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

kissa~rachelle
Senior Member

since 2003-11-27

Posts 988
nowhere special

1 posted 2006-03-02 09:48 PM

is this jessica? ah. either way i love the poem. yes i do.
the only thin g i suggest is the ending...it wouldve been better. but still. it wasnt bad. i like your writing.

*karissa*

I ask why, but in my mind,
I find i cant really rely on myself.
~~~Linkin Park~~~

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

2 posted 2006-03-04 05:09 PM

Hey na this isnt jessica im sorry! Its Athena...umm yeah i wanted the ending to be better then what it is but i really couldnt think that great when i was writing it....2 many poeple asking me things

lol

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Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

3 posted 2006-03-04 11:18 PM

Very original! loved the ending.

talk to ya later

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

4 posted 2006-03-06 01:38 AM

original aye? Hmm well thanks chicka

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Free_Spirit07
~%#*So far from perfect!*#%~
~%#*So far from life and living!*#%~

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