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drowningmonky
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since 2006-03-02
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0 posted 2006-03-02 02:58 PM


She's 14 young and inexperienced
He's 18 wild and carefree
She loves him
He find her inferior
yeah she's 4 years younger then him
and sure love is more than just a tender kiss
but she can't help it now
cause she is breaking down
and she just wants him now.


They went out for a while now
He made her feel as if she was in heaven
but secretly he wanted more from her
and she wasnt willing to give herself up
she let him touch her and she let him hold her
but never will she let him own her
take it away after only 3 weeks
that was imposible for her to deal with.
She couldnt bear it what about her decency.


Her parents didnt know
Her friends told her it was wrong
and that he was to old
but age doesnt matter
when all u want is love
and age only kills and separates you
from those you love.
she hoped it would last forever.
her and him in time become a strong bond
never break apart.
she had so many plans in her
innocent young head.
never did she think about his true intentions.
she just believed that he was her destiny.
how foolish innocence can be and how much people can take advantage of it,blinding it sure is.
All her dreams were stepped on, ran over by an imaginary truck leaving her in some invicible road waiting for the chance to get back up.


Now she sits at home in her bed
not eating and with a tear filled face
she feels empty,all alone
and she wonders if what she did was wrong
If she had let him would he still be here now
she would be happy and without a frown
but she would have gone against herself
for a guy that only wanted to use her in the end.
she could find better and she shouldnt lose hope but right now all she wants is to be alone.



[This message has been edited by drowningmonky (03-02-2006 05:47 PM).]

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1 posted 2006-03-02 03:09 PM


"for a guy that only wanted to use her in the end.
she could find better and she shouldnt lose hope but right now all she wants is to be alone."


seems to me the answer is right here...
she made the right choice....being true to yourself, is always the right choice..

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the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
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2 posted 2006-03-02 07:50 PM


I loved this poem. I can relate in a way with a guy who only wanted that from me. I'm not gonna say it's stupid... I'm not sure who'd I'd offend but everyone has their own standards and mine just happen to be a little higher than some peoples. She did make the right choice if that's all he wanted. because if he really loved her.. he could wait.

I loved this

Hope to hear some more like this..

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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3 posted 2006-03-04 11:27 PM


I agree with both of you.

           Jessica    
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

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