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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

0 posted 2006-03-01 05:48 PM

I can read a farytale
and wish it was my own...
but it does no good to wish
about something never shown.
I can dream a dream,
about having you here with me...
but it does no good to dream,
when a dream is all I see.
I can hear the story
of two, happily forever...
but it does not help the fact
that we are not together.
I can look at pictures
of your smiling face...
but it only makes me remember,
your long comforting embrace.
I can ist here on my bed,
and cry a thousand tears...
but it does no good to cry,
when it won't get you here.
I can write a poem
about how I wish it could be...
but a poem is just there,
it won't make me see.
I can fall asleep
with you on my mind...
but what good does that do,
when a dream is all I'll find.
I can walk around
with a smile on my face...
but when the night comes,
I'll still feel out of place.

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

1 posted 2006-03-01 09:47 PM

Nice very good! maybe you should put some gaps in...makes it easyer to read

x0x0
Free_Spirit07
fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

2 posted 2006-03-01 09:54 PM

I agree. besides that it is lovely

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

helenadepp
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 59
durham, england

3 posted 2006-03-07 02:55 PM

This is another great write! I think everyone wishes that their fairytale would come true.

aliway
Member

since 2006-03-05

Posts 185
With in your eyes

4 posted 2006-03-07 04:17 PM

I agree. it's a very good poem.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-03-07 05:57 PM

It's nice, but I have to agree it would be much easier for someone to read with spaces... Also it helps you from losing your place!

Btw, you might want to check your spelling, i know it took me a moment to figure out what "Sit" was...

I loved the way it flowed though! That was one of the best parts.

@-->---

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

6 posted 2006-03-07 06:46 PM

Thanks everyone for your responses and letting me see my errors.. (spelling).. it's not that I don't know how to spell i just type so fast that I skim everything and don't catch it at first but thanks a lot. lol..

~Heather..

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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