Teen Poetry #7 |
The Darkness |
the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Riding doesn an endless road, 4 a.m., staring out into the mist. Thinking about the darkness, as the breeze throws one last kiss. I close my eyes and try to see a place where I'm with you, but open or shut, no matter what the darkness overclouds my view. The sounds from the world outside, are full of pain and strife. I stare blankly into the dark, comparing them to my life. The surroundings all about me, are trying to quiet down, but unlike all the other times, I hear every sound. On this road that never ends, I see I'm all alone. I want you here holding me, I can't bear it on my own. My eyes get heavy as I start to fall asleep, but the darkness only gets darker, so my stability, I'll try to keep. I know I could dream a dream, of life, love, a hater, and a fighter, but as you can see by the darkness... it's not getting any lighter. *This is one of my older poems from last summer. I wasn't so sure about the exact message it would send because sometimes people don't understand my poetry, but I'm open to any comments or critisism.* Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Good. Can I know what it is about? I made a guess but dont want to post it. Good. Jessica |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Hey jessica, Well this poem I wrote last summer. It it mostly about explaining how I was viewing my life at the time. It seemed that I didn't know where was I was going all the time but it was never ending or I couldn't see a stopping point of the darkness and how I wanted someone that had once been there with me now. In past poems I've written about not being able to hear what people are saying around me or not understanding that's why the "but unlike all the other times, I hear everysound" was thrown in there. Because it's like I finally understood what I was doing and what was going on. I didn't like it because it wasn't what I wanted. the dream part at the end was like knowing that there could be something better but only in my dreams so I'd try to stay awake because I didn't want to dream about something I couldn't have anymore. So as you could see by the darkness (or lonliness in my life) it just wasn't getting better and i knew it. That's mostly what it was about. And when I got the idea for the poem, I really was riding on the road at 4 a.m. but why I was had nothing to do with the poem. it just kinda came to me.... Ya know.. a little inspiration... Not sure if that's kinda what you thought but now you know. Thanks for your response.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
Yea i got this poem. maybe coz its how i write sometimes........i really thing this is great it helps to be able to get your feelings out on paper!!! x0x0 |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
i get it now. i thought it was something close to that but wasn't sure Jessica |
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tearsoflove13762 Member
since 2004-09-05
Posts 488Texas.. and yes i have an accent |
great write i understood as well keep on! |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Wow! I can safely say I loved your poem! Just be careful on your spelling, I don’t know, maybe it’s just me but I always notice spelling errors! Keep up the good work p.s. You know the reader doesn't even really need to know what your writing about... it leaves them guessing, contemplating what you said |
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helenadepp Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 59durham, england |
Another great write! You have a lovely flow to everything you write. |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
thanks everyone.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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