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the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

0 posted 2006-03-01 05:39 PM

In the moment,
I can't find the words to say...
and though you might not notice,
I struggle with it everyday.

I laugh and smile,
but that's all that you can see...
for my mind is later wondering,
if I was really being me.

I sit alone and think,
how I can view this situation...
but the more I search this world,
the more I lose my destination.

My mouth is saying one thing...
my mind.. a close neighbor,
but my heart is only whispering,
and it's words I'll soon savor.

I fall asleep thinking,
of the way it should be...
but this world is not clear,
and no one can really see

I guess I'll keep on going,
with the unwritten question...
and soon I'll find an answer,
sweet love, or obsession?!

(If anyone has any good advice about this poem or any of my others I would really appreciate. I am grateful for all responses and all 'Great writes' but if you do have something that you suggest please feel free.
Thanks.)

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

[This message has been edited by the_girl_next_door (03-01-2006 10:12 PM).]

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

1 posted 2006-03-01 09:44 PM

WOW this is me!!! CRAP this is awesome

umm keep them coming im'a loving your poems

x0x0
Free_Spirit07
fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

2 posted 2006-03-01 09:58 PM

If you change some spelling errors It would be better. Nice write

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

3 posted 2006-03-01 10:13 PM

thanks for your comments. Oh and I fixed the spelling errors ( the ones I noticed) thanks for letting me know

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

4 posted 2006-03-06 09:12 PM

your welcome. sorry if that sounded rude thats not how it was supposed to be.

           Jessica
              :)
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

5 posted 2006-03-06 09:29 PM

no not at all.. It didn't sound rude.. I just wasn't paying attention to what I was doing..
lol

Thanks.

~heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

Artofmark
Junior Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 41

6 posted 2006-07-13 10:40 PM

Wonderful poem

broken_smile1469
Member

since 2006-07-02

Posts 104

7 posted 2006-07-14 12:26 PM

great poem!

"in a world of cheerios, be a fruit loop"

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