the one that makeupstains told me to put a title on

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Teen Poetry #7

the one that makeupstains told me to put a title on

loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

0 posted 2006-06-27 03:08 PM

I try to forget you
But i just cant
I suppose i'll always remember you
Do I really want to forget?
I wish I could
I wish I wanted to
But I cant stop writing about you

"when we find someone whose weirdness is compatible with ours, we join them in a mutual weirdness and call it love-true love"

[This message has been edited by loveislove (06-29-2006 07:50 PM).]

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

1 posted 2006-06-28 11:01 PM

Hey loveislove,

I believe that this is a nice beginning to a poem but as it is I feel like it needs more. It seems to just stop short on the ending like it is incomplete and you are waiting to add more, or that’s what I think.
With a few more stanzas I believe this could be an even more amazing piece than it already is cause I like this but with more it’d be very mind boggling!

Anyway, that’s just a suggestion… I can’t wait to see what you come up with next

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makeupstains
New Member

since 2006-06-27

Posts 7

2 posted 2006-06-28 11:17 PM

hm. i think we all feel
that way at one point or another.
i know, i for one feel that way currently.
i write a lot of letters to people.
that i wish i could just. stop.

i liked the thoughts behind this one.
very much enjoyed.

makeupstains
New Member

since 2006-06-27

Posts 7

3 posted 2006-06-28 11:18 PM

and i completely forgot to say
something. my suggestion. title all
your work. no matter what. because i go
back now and i am looking for a certain poem
that happens to be untitled and it just
presents a problem. because it's extremely time consuming to look through each one. a title would make things much more simple.

also. i think a title just adds more individuality to a poem.

just my thoughts though.

loveislove
Member

since 2006-06-25

Posts 59
USA

4 posted 2006-06-29 07:48 PM

thanks ya'll I FRIGGIN LOVE YOU GUYS!!!! lol...dont ask im just weird like that...

The more people that I can make EXTREMELY uncomfortable, the better

oh_my_goshijustgotexcited
Member

since 2006-07-12

Posts 52
USA, IDAHO

5 posted 2006-07-14 01:13 AM

i liked this poem...BECAUSE of the way it just stops. it gets the point across...of you just wanting to stop writing about this person. i think it was well written.

Viola

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