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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
Running through a storm It's freezing cold and I'm all alone No one to hold and nothing there to keep me warm The pain is increasing my brain is racing My feet are becoming numb My blood is slowing down Getting colder I look up at the dark cloudy sky My last thought just ran through my mind And the silence is becoming loud I take my last breath and fall to the ground! x0x0 |
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Broken*~*Angel New Member
since 2006-02-27
Posts 6 |
WOW great poem lots of depth well done  |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
This was a great poem. I loved how you made everything build up til the end. It was fantastic. Nice write ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
Sounds like a cross between a dream and a nightmare. Its got kind of an erie feeling doesn't it. |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
I agree with byski. To me the middle seems alot like a nightmare. Very nice. xoxo Jessica Where your heart lays is where you belong. |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
OH really? Yeah i guess it does a bit does'nt it? I was real sad in english yesterday...so i wrote it  hehe thaks 4 ur replys x0x0 |
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