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PoetryIsLife
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...in my boxers...

0 posted 2006-02-26 01:27 PM


Life revolving unrelentless.
Sorrows mount with no forgiveness.

Anger boils deep within,
As life unhappy dims in sin.

Passions led to quick embrace,
Quick embrace to long entangle.

Frustrations light the path
Of ever building wrath.

Happiness so hard to catch,
A prize this one never gets.

A soul’s cry to heavenward
For sadness mounting ever inward.

Fighting the good fight, deployed to Iraq.

© Copyright 2006 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2006-02-26 01:59 PM


Hey this is awesome-love the ryme and the flow

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fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

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2 posted 2006-02-26 04:52 PM


sad but true

"Passions led to quick embrace,
Quick embrace to long entangle."

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3 posted 2006-02-26 07:13 PM


it flows very well

            xoxo
           Jessica    
              

       Where your heart lays
        is where you belong.

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4 posted 2006-02-26 10:39 PM


Frustrations light the path
Of ever building wrath.

Happiness so hard to catch,
A prize this one never gets.

A soul’s cry to heavenward
For sadness mounting ever inward.


Well done - and hopefully this feeling and term of service will end soon for you.  Hang in there.

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5 posted 2006-02-27 06:28 PM


I love this poem. It made me think about how things are viewed.

Great Write

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

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6 posted 2006-02-28 05:18 AM


Thank you, everyone, for your compliments. I appreciate all the praise.

Does anyone have any suggestions for improvement?

~Daniel?Titus

Fighting the good fight, deployed to Iraq.

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