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electricxheart
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since 2004-09-05
Posts 184
far away from home.

0 posted 2006-02-18 10:09 PM



eyes deeper,
searching me,
touching every part of my insides.
rejection tastes so sweet upon
my tongue,
so bare are these thoughts
upon the thin sheets.
i need to hold you,
need to feel you.
your hands covering every
inch,
every inch of this heart.
broken and mended,
buried and molded,
you
you

are who i desire when
i close my eyes at night.

© Copyright 2006 Kelly Landis - All Rights Reserved
XxnoraxX
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1 posted 2006-02-18 10:12 PM


Woah- this is so deep- excellant job!  keep up the great work!

XoXo,
XxnoraxX

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since 2006-02-17
Posts 523
Colorado
2 posted 2006-02-19 01:09 PM


Its really deep and wonderful.

Where your heart lays is where you belong.

byski
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since 2006-01-26
Posts 235
Alberta, Canada
3 posted 2006-02-19 01:41 PM


I love the structure of this poem and the ending is just superb. It definitely brought up some of my own emotion as well. It is well done.
Free_Spirit07
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since 2006-01-29
Posts 222
The middle of my mind!
4 posted 2006-02-19 11:32 PM


Nice job *thumbs up*

x0x0
Free_Spirit07    
fear and tears....STOP rounda bout here!

the_girl_next_door
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since 2006-02-26
Posts 591
USA
5 posted 2006-03-01 06:03 PM


I loved the depth in this. I can relate if that is odd. I like the words you chose.. simple but descriptive. loved it.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

fearing-laughter
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since 2001-04-24
Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)
6 posted 2006-03-09 01:56 AM


i may not have really posted on here in awhile, but i still remember who is worth reading, and you are definetely one of those people

bergundy

At least we're still friends! At least we're still alive!--Alkaline Trio

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