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Teen Poetry #7

so you dont care...

helenadepp
Member

since 2006-01-16

Posts 59
durham, england

0 posted 2006-02-06 03:45 PM

ill destroy the city
before ill ever make a home
well you wouldnt be there anyways
so whats the point in being alone?

ill destroy our friendship
like we never met
pretend to be someone different
so your not even upset?

ill destroy the world
things aint going my way
cried my heart out to no one
do you really want me to stay?

XxnoraxX
Member

since 2006-01-24

Posts 122
<3 MA,,,USA <3

1 posted 2006-02-06 04:00 PM

This is great! Good Job!

XxnoraxX

Free_Spirit07
Member

since 2006-01-29

Posts 222
The middle of my mind!

2 posted 2006-02-10 11:38 PM

I agree, keep em coming

x0x0
Free_Spirit07

latteaddict213

Senior Member

since 2006-02-17

Posts 523
Colorado

3 posted 2006-03-09 02:38 PM

nice! liked everything about it

           Jessica

    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

the_girl_next_door
Senior Member

since 2006-02-26

Posts 591
USA

4 posted 2006-03-09 07:38 PM

I liked this poem.. especially the first stanza.. it was a great point of view to look at something.. It would have been nice if would have been a little longer.. but I think that the three stanzas work for this poem.. Great job.

~Heather

Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes.
Want nothing & you will have everything.

stargal
Senior Member

since 2006-03-06

Posts 1352
OR USA

5 posted 2006-03-10 01:43 AM

I liked this poem a lot...
What I really thought was cool was that after every stanza you asked a question! I don't know why I even thought that was so cool, it just stood out to me.

Thanks for sharing! I must agree though, it would have been nice if it had been longer...Got anything written that is longer!?

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