Teen Poetry #7 |
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secreteyes Junior Member
since 2005-12-20
Posts 13Wisconsin, United States |
I cried for help hoping someone was there and indeed you were but you never did care you did see my pain and you saw me cry but you just walked away as I screamed “why” but I guess I should thank you cause I found my own way and now that I’m here I just gotta say that it’s time you see I’m done with it completely done with all your (edit) you see I’m not as weak any more I learned my mistake when I was before I’ve been through so much and so many tears been hurt so bad through out the years but you never cared so you never knew so now what do you think your words can do yes, I hear you talking and Callin me names But look I’m still walkin I’m done with these games I’m finally standing on my own ground never again will you take me down now it will be me you’ll never forget and all you did you will soon regret so just remember and please don't doubt I’m no longer scared I will take you out I’ve lived through a lot and survived all of that so why would I be scared to dispose of a rat [This message has been edited by SEA (12-23-2005 01:19 AM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hi Brittney, I just wanted to let you know that I have edited out the astricked word in your poem. Please be sure that you read the pip guidelines/ rules. Here is a link to them. /pip/guidelines/rules.html specifically, "Misspelling a word, using asterisks to mask some or all letters, acronyms or abbreviations, or ANY other attempt to disguise profanity doesn't make it any less profane. If we can discern your meaning from your content, you obviously didn't disguise it enough. In a few instances, our software will automatically replace a particular obscenity with asterisks. That doesn't make the replacement acceptable, but rather should be considered a warning to the author to take a closer look at their choice of words or choice of forum. Ignoring the warning from the software will probably just generate one from a Moderator." ![]() |
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helenadepp Member
since 2006-01-16
Posts 59durham, england |
hey, i really liked this. I thought it was excellent. Keep it up! |
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XxnoraxX Member
since 2006-01-24
Posts 122<3 MA,,,USA <3 |
Nice poem. GREAT JOB! XxnoraxX [This message has been edited by XxnoraxX (02-06-2006 06:49 PM).] |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
Nice poem here! I loved it ![]() x0x0 Free_Spirit07 |
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latteaddict213![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
long and lovely.i loved it nice write Jessica |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
I loved this poem.. i can see that there was a great deal of emotion put into it.. keep it up.. ![]() ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, I must say i loved this poem! You obviously put a lot of thought, time, and emotions into it.(wow... i'm getting tired, is emotions spelled right?) Just one thing that really stood out to me was this line,"I learned my mistake when I was before", I couldn't figure out what you meant by that? Would you care to enlighten me? Loved the poem though! More power to you ![]() Keep writing @-->--- |
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