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triggerfingerxx New Member
since 2006-02-02
Posts 8 |
this poem is about what im going through... slosh, wrenching throat jabs in my addiction bowl why am i the victim? the compressing speeches and voices slither hate in sublimiality. a being in a bottle messaged riding the sea to nowhere scruched and suffocated, i watch the beauty and the silence of uknown reason the staring moon watches my every push in the sea bobbing in the waves and riding the tide a marionette of the gravitational congregation. theyve chained me to air, my leash of shady dreams gagging may shoot me out of this glass building up,building up, a machine at work, a satisfied craving waiting, waiting for freedom. i keep at the wheel. twisted in my last hope. could it be done? wrenching my insides. my escape rope. |
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XxnoraxX Member
since 2006-01-24
Posts 122<3 MA,,,USA <3 |
Awesome, but why's the title buhlimia? but anyways, real nice poem. keep up the good work. XxnoraxX |
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blaxx New Member
since 2006-01-21
Posts 8Australia |
'gagging may shoot me out of this glass building up, building up' Haunting but a beautiful piece Are you getting help? Feel the love generation |
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triggerfingerxx New Member
since 2006-02-02
Posts 8 |
my mistake, it not called buhlimia, its just the topic of the poem. its just untitled like the rest of my poems.... as for the help part, nope. pure expression doesnt use a crutch.  |
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ahiru New Member
since 2006-01-05
Posts 7 |
nice poem... but you spelt bulimia wrong... and getting help doesn't mean you have a crutch, just so yah know. |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
i have no idea what "buhlimia" means. nice poem though Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Hey, Your poem is a little bitter dontcha think? Also, you lost me on a lot of your lines! Most of them do not make any sense to me... It expresses a lot of emotion though! and you can see from most of my posts that i love anything that expresses what you feel. Just write what you know about and you'll go far  Keep up the good work @-->--- |
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ShelbyLynn13 Member
since 2006-02-15
Posts 73US, Colorodo |
ya.. i agree with latte i dont know what buhlimia means or is it the one when you are forcing yoourself to puke? every one is special in their own way!!! |
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dramaticaddict Junior Member
since 2006-04-13
Posts 10ny, usa |
i totally understand i have been going through this for almost two years now... amazingness <3cassie. ps for those of you who dont know bulimia is an eating disorder where you purge your food |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Oh...I know what that is I just didn't think that was how you spelled it. What do I know? lol. Jessica |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
ok........... first off... i've seen this poem topic a million times.. and i just never thought i would enjoy readin it.. til i finally gave in and decided to read it cause it itching on my nerves.. nice job.. i loved your choice of words and how basically you leave a lot up to the imagination of the reader in some ways.. great job. I was kinda confused but i undestood.. ps.. on your contructive critiques thing.. it says you give up your ability to feel, and in exchange put on a" and then it just stops.. i'm not sure if it's supposed to say something or if the reader is just supposed to fill it in.. lol.. if i would fill it in I would say "put on a mask" just my thought.. i was just wondering about that it was a very cool quote.. ~Heather Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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