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Sexy
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0 posted 2006-02-04 02:36 PM



Life seems perfect
like it was a dream....
But when i wake up
its all gone....

When you drink to
the bottom of that bottle
it doesnt have
the anwsers.....

For the path you
have chose thats
seems right to you...
Is not right

for the lifes you
have created...
But you only think
for you and

not once for us....
Do we look
stupid to you we
know what you

want....
Your freedom to not
have us around.....
well theres the door
sorry for being
in your way byebye
Ma....


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XxnoraxX
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1 posted 2006-02-04 04:03 PM


This poem rocks! I loved it.  Great job

XxnoraxX

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2 posted 2006-02-04 09:24 PM


painful and sad...but very well said.
Free_Spirit07
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3 posted 2006-02-05 01:08 AM


Good job!

x0x0
Free_Spirit07

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4 posted 2006-03-07 08:48 PM


Just a question, why did you have 4 lines in all of the stanzas exept the last? The last has 7. Very nice write.

           Jessica    
            
    Character is what you
      do when you think that
         no one is loking--??

ShelbyLynn13
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5 posted 2006-03-21 10:57 AM


awesome write, i live with an alcoholic and i hate it she always trys to throw me and my mom out bbut she is the one that realy wants out!

every one is special in their own  way!!!

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6 posted 2006-03-21 07:04 PM


Well written poem.  Hope to read more from you.

~Alli~

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