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New poem not sure what to call it
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New poem not sure what to call it |
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broken627 Member
since 2003-11-26
Posts 66Eugene Oregon 
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Intoxication and lasting effects from the intoxication of your breath conspiring with mine. The confusion in my mind continues to arrise My mind is sent into a constant oblivion of colors when you are around Leaving no room for rational thought. -------It's kind of short but I like it...What do you think? I haven't written or been on this site for so long... How is everyone? |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
its great good work but that sounds kinda lame coming from a junior member . Where your heart lays is where you belong. |
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byski Member
since 2006-01-26
Posts 235Alberta, Canada |
It sounds like you are fallowing some kind of structure there, but I'm not sure. It's got great imagery. Not bad at all.  |
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Free_Spirit07 Member
since 2006-01-29
Posts 222The middle of my mind! |
This is kwlz! x0x0 |
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