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layla Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 74 |
Today I dwelled in misery Reminising on some memories how everyone I loved turned their backs on me I am my only Family This circle of betrayel really needs to end I am exhausted and I cannot pretend They can all go their ways I will not make amends The paper and pen are my only friends It hurts me to think I was the Stupid one They all played their games They all had their fun They are the reasons for the sad songs I have sung my voice is my only companion SO im all alone now its just me I have no home now I've become a gypsy I can try but i know I'll never be free I am my only enemy |
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XxnoraxX Member
since 2006-01-24
Posts 122<3 MA,,,USA <3 |
Woah! that poem is so deep but it rocks! I think it would make a great song too. But anyways, keep up the great work! XxnoraxX |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Deep and it rocks! what better of a combination could you ask for? Jessica |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Yikes! I really get into what your saying, that held me spellbound while I read it… Have you ever thought of stanzas though? I believe it helps the reader keep their place as they read, and also it helps keep things a little separate… makes it so you don’t sound like your jumping around as much. Good job though! One of my favorite lines you have written is, “I am my only Family”, I don’t know why, that just really stands out to me… Keep up the great writing, I look forward to more! Thanks for the pleasure of being able to read your poem @-->--- |
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