Teen Poetry #7 |
Not-so-perfect Life |
tapper798 Member
since 2003-07-20
Posts 353My own world |
Lights. The worlds expectations are taking hold of me, tell me,then, what am I supposed to be. Mold me into your perfect Barbie, now I need Ken, but lifes not perfect, which guaruntees that I'll never win. Just pile on the work, after a while it just stacks up, and you have to ask yourself sometimes when it'll ever be enough. Put me under the knife, my body's full of these imperfections, twist my personality around to fit all the misconceptions. I'll straighten my hair everyday just to fit the new trend, put on make-up galore, since the world is all pretend. Camera. It'll be fun, we'll make a play out of the story of my life, and talk about how every mornings routine was a story in it's own of strife. Put on make up, fix your hair, make every day a show, hide everything that makes me me, all the pain no one every knows. primp and pluck away the flaws, make my life so glamourous and fake, and you have to ask yourself just how much of this you can take. Action. Then the curtain closes off the stage, the make-up is now gone, and you start to wonder where your life suddenly went so wrong. You go home, turn the light off, and cry throughout the night, the shows over, no more pretend, it's back to your not so perfect life. I'm sorry if this is a little confusing. I understand it lol It's mainly about the show that you put on for people. How you get ready, but how the true "action" or true life goes on when all the cameras are turned off. idk I like the concept, i'm just not sure how well I wrote on it! Let me know what you think! AIM-blueyed angel940 She's a question without answers... [This message has been edited by tapper798 (07-04-2006 03:27 PM).] |
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the_girl_next_door Senior Member
since 2006-02-26
Posts 591USA |
Hey.. I loved this.. It shows great meaning and emotion.. great job.. I hope to hear more out of you.. you are a great poet with amazing talent.. and I enjoy all of your poetry.. again, Great Great job.. ~Heather~ Desire nothing except desirelessness. Hope for nothing except to rise above all hopes. |
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Alone in the dark Member
since 2006-02-10
Posts 105On the edge of an abyss |
This is one of the best poems I've read in a while. Your understanding of the act people put on for others is very mature for someone so young. You're very talented. I'm looking forward to reading more.. ^*^Angel^*^ |
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latteaddict213
since 2006-02-17
Posts 523Colorado |
Wow. This is very good. One of the best poems I've read this week. It just seems to flow. Flow with it self and flow with how I've felt before. Very very good job. Props. Jessica |
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kin3tix Junior Member
since 2006-07-05
Posts 17Somewhere wondering... |
Great job! I like the "flow" and the "feel" of the poem. Reminds me of school |
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stargal Senior Member
since 2006-03-06
Posts 1352OR USA |
Omgosh I loved this poem! It has to be one of my favorites by you, and the way you set it up was so... amazing! different, yet awe inspiring for me to read. It is very unique yet not to off the map, if you know what i mean. This part was one of my favorites, It'll be fun, we'll make a play out of the story of my life, and talk about how every mornings routine was a story in it's own of strife. Put on make up, fix your hair, make every day a show, hide everything that makes me me, all the pain no one every knows. primp and pluck away the flaws, make my life so glamourous and fake, and you have to ask yourself just how much of this you can take." really, really, good job on the wording of this poem. Thanks for sharing @-->--- |
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