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Picking Up The Pieces
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Picking Up The Pieces |
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Olive_8 Junior Member
since 2003-09-20
Posts 41Canada |
I'm not going to lie to you I love you with all my heart So when you told me your decision That's when I fell apart How do you expect me to cope With the damage that's been done Looking back at the time we shared You can't tell me it wasn't fun I loved the way you made me feel So happy and carefree How can you do this to us Taking you away from me Our time together was so brief What I'd give for one last kiss I need you here right by my side Cuz you I will forever miss You were the first guy I ever loved And who truly broke my heart I thought we were better than that I thought it from the start So now that your decision is made You cannot change your mind I do not want you in my life Someone better I hope to find ~*Everything will be ok in the end, and if it is not ok, then it is not the end.~* |
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snoduck Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 99Selah, WA |
I have to say this piece flowed really well. There wasn't a piece I can say I didn't like, mainly because I can totally relate... the words just kind of spoke to me. lol. But ya this was a great write, thanks for sharing! -Erica- |
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monkey Junior Member
since 2003-09-16
Posts 27 |
this was a great poem and it reminds me of my best friend, she recently had something like this happen to her. i really enjoyed your poem and hope to read more. |
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young_blood Senior Member
since 2003-09-19
Posts 1115Indianapolis, IN |
i agree that it flowed well, but once again, i feel as the the images and the words are very mediocre.-alex now im alone, but not lonely like before |
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dertah Senior Member
since 2003-06-18
Posts 584 |
someone better?????? |
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