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Teen Poetry #7

u and u and u .....only

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

0 posted 2005-12-12 04:11 PM

i was in my car
leaving everything behind
i left those trees
those trees even with good green leaves
i left people
whom i never met
i left those speeding cars
driving at my own pace

i left everything behind

but when it comes to you
my mind stops thinkng
dont know what to say
but the only feeling is to be with u
though i know
wont be possible

i was thinking
tht if somehow u be in the same people whom m leaving behind
would i get u ever again in my life

i dont wanna leave u
i dont wanna leave u
i dont wanna have any second thoughts about u

Love me for who i m

tearsoflove13762
Member

since 2004-09-05

Posts 488
Texas.. and yes i have an accent

1 posted 2005-12-12 09:16 PM

good concept but just remember to check grammer and make sure sentences make sense its distracting even though i understood what you meant. keep up the good ideas though

LOVE NEEDS TO DIE

intention
Member

since 2005-11-13

Posts 59
New Delhi, INDIA

2 posted 2005-12-14 09:34 AM

thanks
i will try improving.

Love me for who i m

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