Cops And Robbers (Villians Of the Night)

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Teen Poetry #7

Cops And Robbers (Villians Of the Night)

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

0 posted 2005-09-07 01:01 PM

Whisper, little sun
as you set us aflame.
we all know that we are
sick of exposure.
Burn, little sun
until you die.
we all love to be
under cover.
(the) (s).

CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa
Member

since 2003-07-16

Posts 248

1 posted 2005-09-11 07:51 PM

I'd love to see what goes on in your mind, even if it were just for an hour. I cannot figure you out. Where do you get this stuff?

Not sure yet if I liked this.
<3ker<3

You know? I thought you were smart...But you cant see what is directly in front of your face...

Don_Juan
Member

since 2004-04-08

Posts 252
Far from where I am going

2 posted 2005-09-13 01:15 AM

I must type that it took me a couple of minutes to understand the purpose of the last line. Sometimes it is hard to understand what the artist wants to portray through his/her words. I enjoyed the thought of the serious and demanding career of law enforcement being transcribed and broken down into childish hiding. I'm not sure if that is where you were going at all, but that's what i recieved from it. There is not much i can pick out to help you get better though, and for that I am sorry. The piece flowed well and as per usual the open endedness of interpretation was enjoyed.

good write.
-John

nice use of muffin

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

3 posted 2005-09-13 01:53 AM

thanks don. crazi, not a whole lot goes on in my mind. or if something does it has to be pretty boring.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

4 posted 2005-09-14 07:52 PM

the poem was fine.....nothing special, but worth the read.

I liked the concept, but I couldn't understand the last verse.

help me out?

javi~

young_blood
Senior Member

since 2003-09-19

Posts 1115
Indianapolis, IN

5 posted 2005-09-14 11:54 PM

the whole thing is about covering up screwing around.
the last line says "under cover" or "under (the) cover(s)". take your pick.

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