Teen Poetry #7 |
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And she sleeps |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden ![]() |
And She Sleeps Stalker-talk for no reason Make up polite conversation So everyone feels a little more Smile as you grit your teeth Trip over your strangled sentences I will see you soon I will be you soon And this still won’t make sense Colored outside the lines In kindergarten, of course everyone always knew She’s a little broken on the outside Damaged on the inside too She never did quite look at you But you envy her composure With a sense of compassion …it rivals something that slightly resembles LOVE. And she sleeps in a brown paper sack On the dark side of East Okay Boulevard A cupboard for chipped coffee cups And completely crippled souls Still, smile as you grit your teeth And stumble over life’s untied shoelaces I will be you soon, she hears I will see you soon But this will never make sense. |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Excellent writing Allysa, and this was superb... And she sleeps in a brown paper sack On the dark side of East Okay Boulevard A cupboard for chipped coffee cups And completely crippled souls |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Colored outside the lines In kindergarten, of course everyone always knew She’s a little broken on the outside Damaged on the inside too She never did quite look at you But you envy her composure With a sense of compassion …it rivals something that slightly resembles LOVE. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ oh man.. that verse is so cool... so layered and angsty.. so honest, real... I love this kind of "in your face" poetry... And stumble over life’s untied shoelaces what a great line of metaphor that is.... impressive writing... I'll have to check out more of your stuff as time allows. well done Allysa. ![]() I'll bare the brunt of your long buried pain |
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Allysa![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Thanks you guys, you know your opinions mean a lot to me.. It's especially nice to see some familiar faces!! |
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skoolyardturtle Member
since 2005-06-28
Posts 96 |
this write is oddly beautiful, it's almost scary. The metaphors are absolutely brilliant, awesome read. |
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